Transformations DLO

Writing- Abandoned places

Abandoned places - writing

Our learning goals are to:

-write a description, using powerful words and phrases

-include some Te Reo Māori

-carefully check that our sentences make sense and have correct punctuation and spelling.

The abandoned house

One stormy grey/mahinahina day I was getting chased by a
person and then all of a sudden I came along an abandoned
house. It looked about 100 years old and It looked rusty. When
I opened the door smokey dust came bursting out.

Then all of a sudden water came pouring out of the house
and all that was left was soft golden sand everywhere. The
damp wooden walls were all mouldy,  and every step I took
I heard the creaking floor and there were holes in the floor.
It was really creepy.

The window was creaking behind me. I said to myself, “ How do
I get out of here?’’ I smelt something like a dirty musty smell.
I looked up and there was water dripping from the ceiling and
there were holes in the ceiling as well. All of a sudden the light
bulb fell from the roof and smashed on the floor. I saw a shadow
and then I started running. Then the ground began to shake...